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by Scott Normandin

The sound of the rain hitting against the window pane was beginning to make Bryan sleepy again. The rhythmic pattern was not the only thing that broke the silence of the chilly night air. He could hear his own breath heaving as he tried to keep from hyperventilating out of terror from this night of Hell. His heart pounded in his chest as though it was fueled by some kind of adrenaline surge that he had never felt. His pulse rang out in his ears like a tribal drum in the darkest jungle.

From his perch near the window he could see the dark figure still standing at the front door. It had been hours since he first arrived to play out his savage plot against Bryan, and now it had turned into a waiting game, and Bryan knew what the caller's intentions were.

He knew the man, yes he did. Matter of fact, it was Bryan's fault the man was there. He had brought his own destruction, and it was only a matter of time before the man outside the front door would get his vengeance on Bryan.

BANG! BANG!

The man outside pounded the door, echoing his sentiment through the house. He did this every few minutes as maybe an announcement of intention to enter the home. As it rang out, Bryan tightened his grip on the tire iron he had found and was holding for solace. He knew the weapon would have no effect on the man.

Bryan wiped the sweat from his brow again as he had been doing almost every minute since the lunatic arrived. His muscles tense and he could feel himself shivering, almost violently but he had no control over his nerves anymore. He knew that if he were to faint he would surely die.

The front door was now the only way in or out of the house. The phone line was cut, and his cell phone had recently been disconnected. He cursed under his breath over the loss of the cell phone. He could have had it now if he had not tried to teach his teenage daughter a lesson, who had borrowed the phone and rang up six hundred dollars worth of calls to talk to her friends. He had it disconnected until she paid for the charges she made on it. That didn't matter anymore. She was dead now, and there was no phone. The six hundred dollars seemed trivial now.

The windows had bars on them all that could not be removed. Bars he had put there for security now had helped trap him inside with no escape. The back door was barricaded with his own car. The maniac outside had driven around the house into his yard and smashed into the back door to block him in. It was that crashing sound that brought his attention to what was going on outside. By that time it was too late to save his wife, and his daughter. They were already dead.

Bryan thought back to the day he had met the man. It had been almost a year ago, and Bryan was out with another woman. He had lied to his wife about having to work late so he could go the bar with his new lady friend. She loved to drink, and Bryan had too much to drink that night before he left that seedy motel where they had been together. There was about a twenty minute drive through the desert in New Mexico he had to drive through, off the freeway where the road was almost always deserted. He chose to drive that road when he had too much to drink, because not even the police seemed to patrol the abandoned stretch of highway anymore.

Bryan never saw the man walking along side the road that night until he had already hit him, and stopped the car to see what happened. By then the man was dead. His corpse lit by only the moonlight and the red tail lights of Bryan's car. He had panicked. He had spent a year regretting dragging the man into the desert and burying him in the sand.

BANG! BANG!

The pounding came again and Bryan braced up again. He looked worriedly at the door, making sure it had not started to give under the persistent beating it was getting. He slowly crept over to the heavy steel covered exterior security door and placed his ear against it. He closed his eyes tightly and strained to listen. He could hear the low guttural rattling breath of the man outside, like fluid was coming up through his throat, obstructing his airway. It was loud against the backdrop of the falling rain and brought more fear into Bryan's already shattered nerves.

Bryan remembered dragging the body into the woods, he could see through the darkness how the man's skull had broken open against the concrete, leaving flesh hanging from the side of his face. His hip was shattered as well, as Bryan had to drag the man by one leg, or the other leg would rip off of his body. It took him two hours to bury him using only his hands. Just to make things difficult for anyone who may find the body, Bryan had removed the man's wallet, wedding ring, watch, anything he could find that would identify the unfortunate pedestrian. He wanted to give the police no extra help in solving this one. Of course, over the past year, no one had found the body, and he discontinued his relationship with his mistress.

BANG! BANG!

The pounding threw Bryan back from the door. In frustration he lashed out and started pounding back with his tire iron screaming out to the man, "Leave me alone you prick!"

Only silence came from the other side of the door. No words, no physical response, just silence. It was getting too much for him.

Bryan craned his head forward again and looked through the peephole to try to look at his assailant. In the darkness he could see the silhouette of the man lit up by distant streetlights. His head was strangely distorted and hanging from the side was some of the man's flesh. He knew that wound. He knew somehow the man had come back for him.

Bryan stormed up the stairs and made his way into the bedroom, then into his closet where he pulled up the rug from the floor. Kneeling down, he used the tire iron to pry against the floorboards till one broke loose. Reaching inside he pulled out a neatly folded bloody shirt. The blood had dried to a sick crusty brown color. He quickly unfolded the shirt and inside were the personal items he took from the man. He ran over to the window and threw open the window.

He removed the items from the folds of the shirt and threw them out the window, at the ghoul standing at his front door below. He bellowed, "Is that what you came for? Is that what you want?"

The answer was a deafening silence.

Bryan was starting to cry. Out on the front walk he could see his wife's body. She was lying face down, spread eagle, with a pool of blood forming beneath her. One of her shoes were off and lying nearby. She had walked up to the corner market and was on her way up the walk with her groceries when she was attacked from behind. The bag's contents spilled out in front of her. A big landscaping rock near her head covered with blood gave credence to his knowing there was no chance she could still be alive. The man had crushed her skull with it.

Bryan backed away from the window. He could no more look at his wife's body then he could look at his daughter's body. When he tried to leave through the back door, he opened it to see his teenage daughter's lifeless corpse in the front seat of his smashed car, with her throat cut almost all the way through to the back of her neck.

BANG! CRASH!

The door downstairs had finally given way and was open. Bryan rushed down the stairs to see the door open, hanging by only one hinge, a large rock just over the threshold. He stepped outside and looked around. He saw no one.

Bryan took one more cautious step, and breathed a sigh of relief. He could run away now and get help. The walking cadaver was probably somewhere in the house searching for him. He felt as though he should run, but his tired legs wouldn't let him. He started to chuckle, and that's when he felt a sharp blow to the back of his legs.

He yelled in pain and dropped the tire iron, grasping his legs in pain. He slowly slumped to the ground, as he heard the unmistakable sound of the tire iron being picked up from the pavement on the front porch, that dragging sound of steel against concrete and the slight distinctive ring that followed as it was lifted clear of the porch.

Bryan turned around and looked into the face of a man he buried almost a year before, with clothes now rags hanging from his putrid rotting flesh. The falling rain had made him glisten. Bryan could smell the decay as the figure moved in close to him, raising the tire iron with one arm, and grabbing Bryan's hair with the other. Bryan clenched his eyes shut, he felt the soft cool rain against his skin, and then he tensed up for the blow, but it didn't come.

Bryan could feel the hot breath on his face as he opened his eyes. The corpse stood there, tire iron raised, Bryan's hair in his tight grip, and face to face with his victim. The man's mouth opened and he began to speak with a harsh, grumbling voice, "I just wanted to tell you why I did this."

Bryan whimpered and nodded. He was too terrified to speak.

The man came in closer and Bryan could smell the breath of dead human flesh filling his nostrils, making him start to heave as the rancid stench stifled his own breath.

"The woman you were sleeping with that night was my wife. She was so distraught over loosing me and then you dumping her, she killed my son, then herself, so I figured I owed you. Eye for an eye, tooth for a tooth."

Bryan watched as the tire iron came down toward his head, then the world went black.

 


~The End~

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